Gran said, "we can tell Mum some of our adventures, but not all of them... and not the one about beheading the Queen."
Review
This story' s character are Kipper and Biff, Chip, their father and mother, and their grandmother. One day, their grandmother visit their house, so they were looking forward to it. And their grandmother gave many presents for them, for example, an ornament and some little golf clubs, a keyboard. So they said, "thanks Gran." Also, she gave them some funny-looking parcels. It was some boomerangs, and they played some boomerangs and golf with her. She showed him what to do a golf, but she broke the window. Next day, Biff and Chip showed their friends the keyboard, and they performed everyone. They had a good time. And she took them to London, Trafalgar Square and Buckingham Palace, waxworks. They took on a boat, and they went under Tower Bridge. So they were so excited. But they were be angry in the waxworks, because they changed the wax dolls. They were feel depressed, but they could have a good time for their grandmother.
(162 words)
Refence
Roderick Hunt. (2003). A Day in London. New York. Oxford University Press.
Hi Seina,
ReplyDeleteIt's good to see you're getting started on your book reviews (BRs). You should have three or more done by now. However, I'd like to point out a few little things you can clear up on this and future BRs.
Quoting passages that already include quotations is rather tricky. You need to replace ordinary, double quotation marks in the original with single quotation marks, and then put your own double quotation marks around the whole quoted passage, like I did in an example on the Writing Studio Blog (WSBlog: BR 1-03: Hairy Maclary (Dodd, 1983), Thursday, April 17, 2014). You also need page numbers for your quotations, if the books have numbers.
For references (check the spelling of your heading!), please note that:
a. Authors' family names go first;
b. Book titles go in italics; and
c. Places of publication should include both cities and states, e.g., New York, NY.
Last, but not least important, you need to include word counts at the foot of every post. For details, please see the Thursday, April 10, 2014, WSBlog post, Paragraph (¶) Breaks and Word Counts for Blog Posts.
Cheers, PB